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Then I saw it, as see through as any hideous day. That filthy creature had left me a sign, signalling her unholy presence. There it was on the bathroom window, I could not believe it. Written in her honey pot juices, marked a message of epic damnation!
I will not cease,
I won't give in,
So if you want peace,
Open up and let me in....
For my finger tingles for you
My love...
I starred open mouthed, appalled as it dribbled from my once perfectly clean window. It was time for drastic measures.... but what will that be?
Shadows Lay Behind The Murder.
I will not cease,
I won't give in,
So if you want peace,
Open up and let me in....
For my finger tingles for you
My love...
I starred open mouthed, appalled as it dribbled from my once perfectly clean window. It was time for drastic measures.... but what will that be?
Shadows Lay Behind The Murder.
posted by A Twig-Like Hermit at 10:50 am
7 Comments:
I didn't like the changes you made. Please, what is with the my love at the end. I suppose it doesn't matter cos it's ur blog site
It needed to flow a little better. Come on, it's not like I re-wrote it, all's I did was add some extra oomph too it. Be glad I put it up seeing as you thought it was soooooo crap I would never even read it. I liked it, and it's not like it's actually you, it's the character so I think the "my love" works just fine. Plus you wrote from my perspective, which is what I do, so I feel it needs to souds more like me in my word parts. Sorry, I'll change it if you feel it's ripping your threads and the sheets wont fit no longer.
Have a happy sunflower day :)
moisture
Yay, Your back... Although I'm a little confused at the comment, but you've always been slighty tilted towards the super-un-pandelic-paranormalness. Ok, Seeya
:)
my femininity genuinely appreciated the poem. whether it was meant that way or not, i liked it. :)
Look, Lisa the Lizard Fairy, Jane liked your poem, although it had the last line added by me, but mostly it was all yours and she liked it. You are happy and all sun shiny for it was good and nothing bad. The end.
Thanks for the message Jane… did you notice I placed your page in my links... Oh yes, only ones so special are allowed that hallowed place above the other things, but mostly on my site is the privilege I would say :)
Great site loved it alot, will come back and visit again.
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